Well this is a very short poem of mine but carries the longest message ....
पल पल, पथ पर , पैरो तले ,फूल बिछाये गए तब ;
पहले पहले अपने कदम चला मैं जब ;
किनारों के सहारे ,चला करता था मैं तब ;
किनारों ने साथ छोड़ा तो लगा ,
ज़िन्दगी में मैं आगे बड़ा अब;
खुली हवा ज़िन्दगी की लगने लगी जब;
पथ बदला ,कंकर बिछे नज़र आने लगे तब;
नासमझ था मैं जब चलदिया उस पथ पर तब;
दर्द का एहसास रहा थोड़ी दूर तक ,
मज़ा आने लगा तब;
फिर लगा ज़िन्दगी में मैं आगे बड़ा तब.
Thanks...
It is just too good for a first effort...!!
ReplyDeleteFirst para won my heart, full of observation. makes it look really professional.
Hats off!!
But again,
Teri har baat pyaar pe aake hi khatm hoti hai,
Tushaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar, kab? Ek poem aisi milegi jisme pyaar or ladki ka zikr nahi hoga
:D
i think ismain na to koi ladkii ka zikr tha na to koi pyaar ki baat thiii
ReplyDeleteand still thanks
"FANTASTIC" z da word ;)
ReplyDeleteGood work dude!!
Keep goin. . .
Amaazzzingggggggggggggggggggggg..............now she will definately wonder man :-)) proud of you yaara
ReplyDeletethank you
ReplyDeleteboth
supu and phendu :P :P :D
poem to mast hai ! but kis incidence ka zikr kar rahi hai ye samajh nai aaya dhang se....
ReplyDeletenice one tuttu..
ReplyDeleteincidents khena better rahega
ReplyDeletei just meant
that you feel a little more grown up when you overcome some difficulty ...thats it ...simple ,short and SEXY lol
and by the way thanks JAY
hey gr8 genesis:) luvd dis attempt in hindi..:)superb message..pehla para ws mindblowing..d second one hd an equally good msg but hd to read it again to figure it out correctly :)..i guess its about making wrng choices,having some regrets & learning to move on, to rise abv them..correct me if i am wrng so dat i know wat u wanted to say :)
ReplyDeletekaim aa veere..... :P
ReplyDeletezamane ko laga main to gir gaya,,
lekin main to khud mein jaaga thaa tab...
haseen hain bade,, maine jo khaaye hain dil par,,
zakhmon se kabhi main bhaaga thaa tab...